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Going Deep in Your Story, Part 2

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There are plenty of ways to go deep into the story you’re telling. Many people think going deep refers to deep point of view, which I covered in last week’s post. Today, I want to discuss ways to add richness to your storytelling by going deep in other ways.

One way is to use all five senses (smell, sight, taste, touch, and hearing). Yes, I know this is a basic rule. But think…in this digital age, when was the last time you put your phone away and just looked?  Learn to be an observer of people and environments. People watch. What do you notice? What about your environment? What color of blue is the sky? How does the snow look when it falls slowly?

Take a scene you’re currently working on. Have you included what the character experiences? The purr of a sports car? The stickiness of a fast-food counter? Smells are sometimes overlooked, but I love these lines from Rudyard Kipling: “Smells are surer than sights or sounds/To make your heart-strings crack…”

Sometimes I’ll include the sixth sense, intuition (sparingly). You know that feeling of knowing when someone’s lying or when your hair rises on the back of your neck? This sense is great for creating tension.

I can imagine you’re thinking, “But I can’t write the story and include all of that at the same time—it’s too much!” You’re right, it is. So just write the story first. One of my favorite quotes is by Terry Pratchett: “The first draft is just you telling yourself the story.” Spill everything onto the page. Don’t edit, don’t fuss about word choice. It doesn’t need to be pretty—you can add the five senses in the following drafts.

Something else you can include in the second draft (& third, and fourth, and fifth, and…) is descriptions. Metaphors and similes add to the mood of the story as well. Make use of them (again, sparingly) through the character’s eyes. For example, a high society woman wouldn’t say or think someone was “as happy as a pig in slop.” Stay true to your character so the reader can stay in the character’s skin.

Show, don’t tell, how someone feels. Telling is much weaker than showing.

Shari felt anger sweep over her. Instead: Shari clenched her shaking hands into fists.

Ron was ashamed. Instead: Ron blushed and turned away.

The Emotion Thesaurus by Angela Ackerman and Becca Puglisi is a great resource to use. It matches actions to feelings to help you make the shift from telling to showing.

Enjoy going deep in your next story!

Avoid Vanilla Writing, Part 1

Welcome to this week’s #WritingWednesday post!

We’ve all heard different rules of writing—show, don’t tell; avoid –ly adverbs, don’t head-hop with point of view, blah, blah, blah. But a sure death knell for a story is vanilla writing. No one wants to write the yawn-inducing DNFed story (Goodreads speak for Did Not Finish). While “avoid vanilla writing” is a bit vague, here are a few ideas to keep your readers up late turning pages.

  1. Murder your darlings: this quote is attributed to William Faulkner or Oscar Wilde (or others), but actually originated with Arther Quiller-Couch from his 1914 lecture “On Style.” Good job, Arthur! But what does it mean? It means all those things you absolutely love, the cutie-patootie characters, clever dialogue, and flowery descriptions should be eliminated if they’re unnecessary or don’t move the plot forward. Believe me, I know it’s tough—I’ll weep with you while we read on.
  2. Zzzzz: Ending the chapter or scene with the character going to sleep. I’ve done this. Sometimes it can’t be helped. But if you can find another ending, maybe a twist to ratchet up the tension, the scene will be better and the reader will keep reading.
  3. The Normal Routine: Mary Sue wakes up to the sun streaming into her room. She stretches, slips out of bed, and pads downstairs for her regular cup of coffee. She pulls her favorite cereal from the cupboard, but the dog Benny whines and dances around her ankles. She lets the dog out and gazes out on a lovely morning with white, puffy clouds and singing birds. The bird feeder was empty–she’d have to refill it after breakfast. Her thoughts turn to what she can make for supper this evening. Perhaps her husband’s favorite casserole…

Have I lost you yet? Aside from my bad writing example, it’s boring! Nobody cares about Mary Sue or her coffee or what she’ll make for supper. Summarize and get to the point when she discovers her husband is having an affair or her dog tore up her neighbor’s prize-winning roses…

Check in next week for Part 2 of Avoid Vanilla Writing. And in the meantime, go have some ice cream. After all, it’s still National Ice Cream Month. 🙂

 

 

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